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Damn good. Really damn good. I love what you've done here. You took Escape and did what weird al yankovic does.

I really like this one, good job. Berklee would be proud

Then why not write it the proper way? Even if what you said is true, what is the actual chorus? If the chorus or refrain line is here it comes now listen up hear is my confession Where did you go from here? Stop lying to me stop lying to me ( are these 2 lines a bridge?) because the way you have the...

I critiqued the lyrics for one reason. Everyone posted up what they thought was a great local lyric. I always say " be careful what you call great" Art can be judged in terms of craft ( control, direction, etc) You posted the lyrics like someone would say 2+2=5. I came in and thought, &quo...

Oh , and I forgot to mention, Escape is a very clever song. The story is cleverly written, you don't find the element of clever in todays song. Think about it, a relationship gone bad by boredom, each person places an ad in a personal column, not knowing the other did the same thing. They find out i...

No one here is saying that you have to have every song with the formula v prechorus chorus verse2 prechorus chrous bridge verse3 prechorus chorus However, when you write living the lie believing the truth hidden from yourself, forgiveness torn to believe the passion is real hidden from yourself, for...

For my 2 cents, I would like to share a clever lyric that I always enjoyed throughout the years. It is very cleverly written story ( though not a local song) Escape ( the Pina Colada song) by Rupert Holmes I was tired of my lady, We'd been together too long, Like a worn out recording, Of a favorite ...

One other thing. Given the lack of rhyme and supportive imagery in your songs, you could really use a thesaurus and a rhyming dictionary

Deviance relax, take a chill pill. what band are you in?- irrelevant to my critique and to what is well crafted how many clubs have you played in?- irrelevant to my critique and to what is well crafted how many years experience do you have?- irrelevant to my critique and to what is well crafted how ...

Screaming fans every night? Of course you will have screaming fans. We live in a modern society where everything is good, and there is nothing wrong with anything. This same philosophy is the down fall of everything from music to every day jobs. It just goes to show no one listens to lyrics anymore....

" Angel By My Side" A line like " I remember when I sat down with an angel by my side" comes off far fetched, like it can just happen like that. If angels do exist, THEY control what happens. Most often a person cannot see an angel, but if they appear to us, they are gone in a fl...

Tripwire This lyric offers no clear picture of what the song is about, other than the fact someone is living life dangerously. In order for this lyric's title to work ( Tripwire) the writer has to introduce what that is. For example, if the song is about DRUGS, then introduce or at least HINT at lin...

" You're so Fine" The song is awkward from every possible angle. 1 I don't like the first person present tense action going on in this song. It sounds stupid when the narrator is talking to this girl and DESCRIBING everything he is doing. When you want to pick up a girl in a bar you don't ...

Critique of the song "media" This song lacks a chorus or at least a refrain line. The song's structure is too repetitious sounding because it consists of 4 verses back to back. I want to hear at least a refrain at the end of each verse. The lyric is also filled with fragmented thoughts and...